Ho boy, with a title like that, how could it go wrong? >_>
Lots of smoking going on, Mina included, but then that's hardly surprising given the times.
When did Mina get made the leader? Wonder if it was assigned, or she just... slipped into the role?
Huh, you'd think Griffin would go with a "disguise" that he could take off more easily if he needed to go fully invisible. More easily-removable clothes, a mask and gloves, perhaps?
Ah, goat-slitted pupils on the eyes. Reminds me of the descriptions of the demons in the Rachel Morgan (the Hollows) series. Which seems to be the effect he's going for here, as well... unless that's a detail from the original. I don't know.
Nice to see Mina out-thinking the guys and using her brain, after her introductory chapter.
Gee, somehow I get the sneaking suspicion that Quatermain doesn't go around playing lower-class British much. Just a hunch, mind.
Huh, you'd think a guard would be armed with, like, at least one gun in place of one of those three swords. Yes?
Anyhow, well, that went quick! Action's finally picked up, and yet I don't have much to comment on for some reason! If I missed anything, feel free to point it out. ;)